Storymoja

Celebrating East African Writing!

‘I didn’t do it’ by Lillian Kithia

Photo by Jerry Riley. Click on image or Visit http://www.jerryriley.com/blog to see more pictures of Kenya

Every time I asked him he gave me yet another tale. First it was the long rains that had swept away everything in his shamba and then it was the sick cow that gave no more milk. Every day he got more creative. Sometimes I even laughed at his explanations, they were not funny, No!! But to seeing him dig into his mind for yet another lie, now that was funny.

But was I laughing because I couldn’t cry? Was I focusing on the lightness of the moment because if I dared focus on the seriousness of it something inside me would finally give?  I don’t know!

At night I rehearsed the long speeches I would attack him with the following day. Quoting lines like ‘Give Caesar what belong to Caesar’ sometimes even imagining how I would punch him in the face and take whatever of his I could, but whenever I showed up at his door, my rehearsed speeches left me, my memory failed.

May be it was the sight of the stale yellowing ugali on the brown, once white saucer on the table. Maybe it was the buzzing flies that rested upon whatever they could. Maybe it was the suffocating stench that hit me whenever I stepped within ten feet of him… Whatever it was, it made my long rehearsed speeches vanish and instead they were replaced by a feeling of pity. And then after, I cursed myself for caving; for allowing mercy to take the better of me.

Mercy is how I got myself there in the first place. I shouldn’t have fallen for that story. ‘Ati baba yuko hospitali’ and barely two days later the guy was dishing out free drinks at the local drinking hole.

But how many lies had I fallen for?

When J. said he would marry me if I gave him a baby only to leave me for that girl who works at the drinking hole, I fell for that! And when S. told me she never even liked J. only to find out the two of them were playing grown up games behind my back. I fell for that too!

All he needed to do was act a little desperate and I would give him whatever money I had.

Honestly, I was willing to let it go, but when I saw him there, when I heard he was dishing out free drinks at the local bar, I had to do something.

That’s why I sent K. the muscle. I just asked him to scare the man and maybe take a few things here and there. Anything that I could sell and recover whatever he owed me. But when K. called me and told me he had finished him…. I honestly hadn’t asked him to do that.

So if I am guilty for any crime it is that of sending someone to take what rightfully belonged to me. Your Honor I would never kill a man!!

©Lilian Kithia

If you would like this piece to be the Story of the Week, please vote below on a scale of 1 to 10, with 1 being weak, and 10 being excellent. The numbers will be tallied on Friday and the story with the highest figure shall be Crowned Story of the Week. Be sure to fill in your name and verifiable email. You can include your critique/comment after the vote.

44 comments on “‘I didn’t do it’ by Lillian Kithia

  1. Beatrice Wainaina
    August 23, 2010

    Interesting! and you are guilty for being a good writer. I loved it. I vote 8.

    Like

  2. Steven Owuor
    August 23, 2010

    very well done Kithia. I vote at 10 points.

    Like

  3. John Njiru
    August 23, 2010

    A nice flow. Extreme imagination.Superb!

    Like

  4. catherine
    August 23, 2010

    awesome. i rate it 9 n keep up the good work

    Like

  5. Grace Wanjiku
    August 23, 2010

    I love everything about your story.i vote 9 out of ten.kip up the gud work gal n b more creative.

    Like

  6. Martin Gicheru
    August 23, 2010

    Thanks Lil Kithia, tol you sometime ago you inspire me big. Yo a good writer.
    Regards,
    Martin Gicheru
    Search Engine Expert

    Like

  7. Jyce Kathuri
    August 23, 2010

    A good one . keep going. i like and vote 8

    Like

  8. Merci
    August 23, 2010

    This piece is brilliantly written.Good work Lilian, I give 8.5 and my blessings too.

    Like

  9. Kennedy
    August 23, 2010

    I honestly give 7.Nice one though.Happens in real life.

    Like

  10. dawooh
    August 23, 2010

    Vote 10

    Like

  11. Allan Olingo
    August 23, 2010

    hahah… I find you so guilty of being overly creative. Lovely piece that left me wondering. Are u really guity?

    Like

  12. John
    August 23, 2010

    Lilian,
    Great article as always…very interesting

    Like

  13. John
    August 23, 2010

    i vote 8 for it…

    Like

  14. Allan Olingo
    August 23, 2010

    ooh sori i rate it 9!

    Like

  15. Zippy
    August 23, 2010

    10

    Like

  16. Charles Njue
    August 23, 2010

    gotta hand it to you, you’ve got this beautiful way of soliloquizing – asking yourself all these rhetorical questions as you go along that makes your writing splendid.. but am wondering .. where you limited by word count? if you were, then you did pretty well, you’ve got a story somewhere in there, if you were not, i feel that we could have done with a little bit more detail,it needs more flesh. so my vote here depends on those two factors. with word count limitation, i would give vote 7.5 and without i would vote 4

    Like

  17. Norman
    August 23, 2010

    You are a great write I vote 9

    Like

  18. Kimanthi Njue
    August 23, 2010

    Such an interesting story…..I give it an 8. I love the plot….

    Like

  19. Sermie Wamalwa
    August 23, 2010

    Awsome, i shouldnt have read it coz now i want more…8.5 is yours my dear

    Like

  20. Njenga Njeri
    August 23, 2010

    I give it an 8.

    Like

  21. Carol
    August 23, 2010

    Thoughtful story. I vote 9

    Like

  22. Kelvin Gitonga
    August 23, 2010

    You must have been born thinking right from day 1 in your life . That story deserves a mmmwwahhh! i vote 9.

    Like

  23. ALLOYS ANGAGA ONYISI
    August 23, 2010

    Way forward:
    The storyline is captivating but the manuscript should be assessed well and changes to be effected in the cited areas in order for the manuscript to be adopted for publishing.It is good but requires a thorough revision and check up before getting published. The story may do well if published.

    Strengths
    1.The title ‘‘I didn’t do it’is relevant for the story since you have brought out the relevancy of the story.
    2.You have used simple English that can be understood by the readers.
    3.The story has good flow that is well understood by the readers.
    4.The story looks interesting.

    Like

  24. munyi
    August 23, 2010

    07/10. just like my teacher, there is room for improvement.

    Like

  25. ALLOYS ANGAGA ONYISI
    August 23, 2010

    Way forward:
    The storyline is captivating but the manuscript should be assessed well and changes to be effected in the cited areas in order for the manuscript to be adopted for publishing.It is good but requires a thorough revision and check up before getting published. The story may do well if published.

    Strengths
    1.The title ‘‘I didn’t do it’is relevant for the story since you have brought out the relevancy of the story.
    2.You have used simple English that can be understood by the readers.
    3.The story has good flow that is well understood by the readers.I vote 8
    4.The story looks interesting.

    Like

  26. Jaime
    August 24, 2010

    WOw…i love the twist…its a great piece and I VOTE 9.9. This are things that happen in our country and the story should be crowned story of the week…

    Like

  27. Njahira
    August 24, 2010

    I vote 10,please crown this the story of the week…let people know that they should have good intentions always. It will be very educative because it captures every detail as it happens in real life. Congrats Lillian.

    Like

  28. Jaime
    August 24, 2010

    WOw…i vote 9.9. It sounds more of a true story…thats a great writter…

    Like

  29. Njahira
    August 24, 2010

    I vote 10. Great story…

    Like

  30. Ruhama Wakawa
    August 24, 2010

    Not a bad story. Only that if it’s supppose to go with the provided photograph, then it doesn’t match. All the same, i vote 6.

    Like

  31. pithon
    August 24, 2010

    Two thumbs up!9 is my vote!

    Like

  32. Eberekpe
    August 25, 2010

    The writer has worked purely from the photo that was presented without the writers’ creative imagination…6

    Like

  33. Maina
    August 25, 2010

    I feel the story drags on for too long. I vote a 6 for it.

    Like

  34. peris
    August 25, 2010

    i vote 10 really great story. gud work Lilian

    Like

  35. Japheth Korir
    August 25, 2010

    I love the turnaround at the end. Perfectly serves the title of the story. I vote for 8.

    Like

  36. Florence W Nyagah
    August 26, 2010

    That’s a captivating sory. I vote 10 for it. Keep on keeping on girl.

    Like

  37. Florence W Nyagah
    August 26, 2010

    That’s a captivating story. I vote 10 for it. Keep on keeping on girl.

    Like

  38. Lennox Njeru
    August 26, 2010

    I vote 10. This story is definately the best

    Like

  39. amina
    August 27, 2010

    awesome, i vote 10

    Like

  40. steve njore
    August 30, 2010

    Keep it up,i vote 8.5

    Like

  41. shila
    September 1, 2010

    m givin a 10…..its awsme

    Like

  42. essie
    September 21, 2010

    excellent piece, may the best win. i give 8!

    Like

  43. eve
    September 28, 2010

    very interesting!..give it a 9.5

    Like

  44. Jenny Suena
    September 29, 2010

    Your story makes for an interesting read…love your imagination. You get 9.

    Like

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: